1、废话连篇急煞读者
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Topic --Should college students be allowed to get married?
This topic is very interesting. I am very interested in talking about this topic. Because I am also a college student and I am not married……
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In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married。
2、观点不明态度暧昧
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Topic--Should college students be allowed to get married?
I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……
3、渐行渐远 离题千里
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Topic---It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?
I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places。
4、中式英语人见人跪
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Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life
In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……
Topic 2- The population problem
The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there。
Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?
I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chop when I go out buy things……
Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person
Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a person always does bad things, he will get “baoying”。